Feedback

First draft feedback 

We showed the first draft of our title sequence to the class and asked them for feeback on what was good and what we could improve. We prepared six questions to ask them which were:

• Do you understand the concept?

• Would you add eerie/diagetic/or ironic music/sound?

• Do you think our change in genre has made our piece better?

• Do you think the quick cuts are effective? 

• Do you feel confused or on edge?

• Do you think the titles fit?

  Everyone agreed that this title sewunce was vastly improved from our previous one as it showed better editing skills and followed a genre better. As we haven't yet added sound people suggested that we should use eerie music to add to the suspense and tension along woth diagetic sound of the maych lighitng and maybe heacy breathing in the background as the man is looking around the house. Our fast cuts and cuts to the titles were particularly liked as they added tension and biult up to the climax of the extremely fast cuts at the end. The main critisisms we received was that the concpet was hard to understand. Even though we do want it to be a mystery and for the audience to be confused, many thought the girl looked scary because it was shot in the dark and she was wearing a white dress and black boots, wheras we wanted her to look more vulnerable. We have decided to re shoot the parts of the girl walking concentrating on mise en scene such as jewellery, phone and a dress to make her seem more girly and vulnerbale. We are also going to have some shots showing her face rather than not seeing her face at all as some people thought there was too much mystery.